cardiff_gareth wrote:
Your hair light is too strong and turned (his?) hair blonde, like a badger style! It needs moving as it's not defining the whole hair outline. The main light also needs work as it's flat, especially the 2nd shot and the last has harsh shadows.

If the hair light was via a hotshoe flashgun on slave or wireless trigger I would adjust the heads zoom slightly or ideally if it has one pull out the wide angle diffuser to spread the light more and then experiment with toning the power down.

Your main light, what are you shooting with? Do you go through a light modifier and where are you positioning it?

Glowingblue wrote:
Take no notice, these are an improvement, the last one in particular, my fave of this set would benefit from a vignette, this would direct eyes towards your daughters face and her beautiful eyes