c&c requested....

got some networking opportunities coming up next month....
targeting young, affluent professionals....
I was thinking something like this to hand out as 4x6 cards...
what do you guys think?

Hi, Don,

The guy on the right makes an interesting portrait but I'm not sure how many of your "young, affluent professionals" would like to be seen in such an honest light. The guy on the right looks like a fast-rising shoe salesman. I think the key in appealing to the type of market you're aiming at is to make them look self-confident, thrusting and impishly good-looking, a little like Richard Harris. A friend of mine at the top of the oil business (who claims to have met Richard Harris enjoying a pint outside a pub in Soho one summer evening) asked me to photograph him in the style of a 1940s or 50s Hollywood movie star - in black and white. That's the way they think. Your layout and borders are perfect. I'd put a comma after "Business" and rearrange the letters in "Ecxellent".

Good luck

Al

thanx....that dyslexia rears it's head at the most inopportune times...lol!
you do realize that all three idiots (the two in the first image and the shoe salesman on the right) are all me, right? hehehe!
I appreciate the feedback, thank you!

If your looking for portrait work, I wouldn't produce a business card bearing a portrait with the lighting on the "broad side of the face" looks far too amateur and is normally not very flattering (there can be exceptions such as making a thin face look wider).

And if it's your own business I wouldn't produce a card with your own picture on the left, it's not doing your own image any good. Before and after shots are fine as long as they are of someone else. It never did any harm to the hair restorer industry or the makeover industry.

shim

Also - have a quick look at magazines etc to find what font styles are in fashion
Maybe the font you've chosen is bang up to date - I wouldn't know
Can make a big difference, though

Well, I love honesty.

I am not trying to pass myself off as one of the "Young and affluent"...lol...

and I'm content with the descisions, I made. I felt the haircut made my head look longer than I'm used to seeing myself and went with broad lighting, and that face has some scars, and the nose has been broken and the teeth still have some cracks and chips from my previous, rather rough existence, so that angle makes the nose look straight, and I think the theme of making a "Bum" look "business like" is a fitting choice, before and after shots of the guy handing them the card, leaves no doubt on whether the final image is an improvement. If I can make me look good, what can I do for them?

of course I could be wrong...

there are shots in my files of younger looking men, that are more trendy looking...
will give some more thought..
thank you.

As long as you think it's right Don, that's all that matters.

shim

Your points are valid.

You've definitely driven home the "image improvement" concept!

I think it's good. One thing: the border of the left pic is scratchy, but the right pic is not. I'm thinking they should match?

Oh, and the p in "Expressions" is overlapped by the E in Excellent.

I think the border on the right should be solid, small and tasteful. (or nothing at all)
I would make the image on the right high key, and the hole right side white and clean. The font should be san-serif - clean and tidy and aligned with the image edges in an invisible grid. No text effects at all.

Personally, I would also wear a white shirt under the jacket to create a nice V and lighten up the image some more.

The image on the left could be chopped in half and straightened, just showing the old side, as the 'After' is provided on the right side of the leaflet. With the left image half as wide, you would have space down the middle for nice neat typography with no frills.

All v. subjective of course