Broken Tree
by davidstorm
OK, so I would like some advice on this one as I cannot get my head around the composition. I like the colours and the general scene but it's not right. Any offers?
Shot as evening drew near - I was waiting for sunset colours, but it clouded over and started to snow a bit.
Pentax-M 28mm F3.5, K-x
Shot as evening drew near - I was waiting for sunset colours, but it clouded over and started to snow a bit.
Pentax-M 28mm F3.5, K-x
Uploaded19/12/2011 - 22:01
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Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:09
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sandinista wrote:
I think the tree might be the problem David as it cuts across instead of acting as a lead in, also the branches draw the eye into the bottom right.
What would you do with it Jim? I think the original composition was not right so I'll have to go back to the location and re-shoot it.I think the tree might be the problem David as it cuts across instead of acting as a lead in, also the branches draw the eye into the bottom right.
Regards
David
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:15
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That's really good David,
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:17
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Charlotte wrote:
That's really good David,
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.
Thanks Charlotte, it's great to get feedback from everyone on the Gallery - I think it really helps us all to improve!That's really good David,
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.
Regards
David
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:20
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I cropped it to a semi pano with equal parts water and sky which works pretty well to my untrained eye
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Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:33
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sandinista wrote:
I cropped it to a semi pano with equal parts water and sky which works pretty well to my untrained eye
Thanks Jim, this is also what I thought but I don't think panos work too well on the PU Gallery.I cropped it to a semi pano with equal parts water and sky which works pretty well to my untrained eye
All the best, David
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:40
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I think it's a stunning shot which would stand on its own without the tree if you crop the water at the bottom ........ as Jim suggests
Posted 20/12/2011 - 08:54
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I agree with the others. This is a great shot with beautiful colours and lights. Your main subject is the hill side and the composition doesn't need the tree in the forground IMHO. A crop could help it.
Posted 20/12/2011 - 11:46
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amazing picture with such good usage of light and colors (and as others already sad - I also think that cropping the tree would make it even better)
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Posted 20/12/2011 - 13:06
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When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
Posted 20/12/2011 - 20:15
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autumnlight wrote:
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
Right words!!!This is a wonderful capture....and tree is like a window that help our arms to stay and to keep our head in the right position so eyes can admire this EDEN. Do you like my poetry????
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
Posted 20/12/2011 - 20:41
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GIULIO57 wrote:
Giulio, I think you have excelled with your peotry this time! I can picture in my head someone resting their arms on the tree and gazing at the view beyond. You have transported my picture to a fantasy land! Thank you, please keep the poetry coming.autumnlight wrote:
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
Right words!!!This is a wonderful capture....and tree is like a window that help our arms to stay and to keep our head in the right position so eyes can admire this EDEN. Do you like my poetry????When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
Regards
David
Posted 25/12/2011 - 09:49
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I've just seen the cropped version in PPG, nice work David
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Posted 26/12/2011 - 14:49
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Sincere thanks to you all for your help and advice on this picture! It really is great to have such a wonderful community and such helpful comments.
Regards
David
Regards
David
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