Honest comments wanted!

chaude
Posted 07/05/2011 - 21:47 Link
A place that I will pass by everytime I walk down hill from Uni, but since I had the camera with me I found this scene quite attractive, though I'm not sure I've done the best thing I could with the picture. It has been cropped a little bit from the original.
Really asking for ideas and C&C
Thanks
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johnriley
Posted 07/05/2011 - 21:56 Link
I can imagine that walking down this road feels great, surrounded by that canopy of green. From a photographic point of view, the biggest weakness I find is that the brightest areas leak out of the top left, dragging us that way rather than down the road.

The solution might be to darken that top left corner and make sure the lightest green is way down the road, thus concentrating our attention there.

It's a pleasant but unexceptional scene, so maybe it needs something else to create more in the frame. A figure in the distance may do the trick.
Best regards, John
Edited by johnriley: 07/05/2011 - 21:56
Smeggypants
Posted 07/05/2011 - 21:58 Link
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jurysi
Posted 07/05/2011 - 22:18 Link
I agree with johnriley. My eye is drawn to the left and up because of the light both high in the leaves and from the road that enters the scene. It's a great, relaxing area, but as a photo, it lacks "something" to attract/lead the eye, thus I find I get lost. One possible idea is finding a subject in the scene (the lamp posts, the double yellow line, the wall, etc) that pulls/directs focus in the direction desired (I assume down the road).

Perhaps taking the shot from further down the road (past the gate on the left), would create the desired effect, or switching sides to allow the lampposts or double yellow line to lead/focus the eye down the road would help. This angle would remove the road from the scene, and also beneficially alter the light.

Hope my rambling above helps .
Edited by jurysi: 07/05/2011 - 22:34
chaude
Posted 07/05/2011 - 23:07 Link
Thanks guys, definitely helps. I was trying very hard to avoid the sky as it was just a single sheet of grey, explaining why the light patch was at the top left.
Not sure I'll take the picture from across the road as I wouldn't want to get ran over But certainly a person in the photo would have made it a lot better. I tried it with a car but it more or less spoiled the whole thing.
And yes, Smeggy, that is the spot. well done
Smeggypants
Posted 07/05/2011 - 23:51 Link
Cool. Maybe you can use Google street view to sit can compose a shot at home
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Smeggypants
Posted 07/05/2011 - 23:53 Link
chaude wrote:
But certainly a person in the photo would have made it a lot better.
Put the camera on either the wall or the pavement on 12 second timer and get yourself in the shots and lay down on the pavement ( Or the road if you're brave ) and adopt the unconscious position. :0
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chaude
Posted 08/05/2011 - 18:44 Link
Thanks for the suggestions! If I see another road like this next time I'll give it a try! Not sure I'll take the time to walk down the hill next week, rather get home quickly and keep revising!
Or if I walk, it'd be a late night

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