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Posted 03/10/2013 - 12:57 Link
What did you do there Mr?

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Posted 03/10/2013 - 13:03 Link
This is as close as I can get I think?

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michaelblue
Posted 03/10/2013 - 14:49 Link
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andrewk
Posted 03/10/2013 - 14:59 Link
And mine, maybe like this .....

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bettyswolloks
Posted 03/10/2013 - 15:22 Link
I like the off centre mono version most out of the edits Pal, the highlight on the wall takes the eye to the flowers which then flows down the vase, if that makes sense!?
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Posted 03/10/2013 - 15:33 Link
Thanks for the versions lads

bettyswolloks wrote:
I like the off centre mono version most out of the edits Pal, the highlight on the wall takes the eye to the flowers which then flows down the vase, if that makes sense!?

Hooray!

Someone who likes the mono version. Its what I like as well.

The hardest thing about all of this is going with what YOU actually deem worthy yourself. BUT I am really thankful for everyones critique - its REALLY helpful

Thanks
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bettyswolloks
Posted 03/10/2013 - 16:44 Link
No worries

To my mind, most of what I do is for myself, if I like it then it's good enough, if someone else then likes it its an added bonus and I suppose a good indication that I'm on the right track.

BUT!!

I need to up my medication if what I'm doing is for a *client!!




*The word client refers to friends and family LoL!!
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bwlchmawr
Posted 03/10/2013 - 18:12 Link
The main problem as far as I can see is the floral, fussy vase (nice enough as a vase) is fighting for attention with the flowers.

The Doc's version is more assured and suits the subdued lighting better. I think.
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Pentaxophile
Posted 04/10/2013 - 10:59 Link
Had a little go... like the simplicity and the subtlety of the original. Toned down the magenta in the vase and cropped/cloned out the corners of the table to further simplify.

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Posted 04/10/2013 - 11:00 Link
Would have been better if I'd got it perfectly central but I hope you can see what I was going for!
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Posted 04/10/2013 - 11:39 Link
Love it!
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Father Ted
Posted 04/10/2013 - 22:21 Link
bwlchmawr wrote:
The main problem as far as I can see is the floral, fussy vase (nice enough as a vase) is fighting for attention with the flowers.

FWIW, I agree.
The strong lighting on the right hand side of the vase just keeps grabbing my eye.
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Posted 04/10/2013 - 22:24 Link
If I had drawn the curtain the ambient light would have been flat and just using the single light above was too much.

I dont think there is anything wrong with strong light so long as it doesnt overcome the texture - in this case of the vase. Its a vase full of flowers that has strong light coming from a window - thats the intention Ted

Ted?

Im going mad...

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bforbes
Posted 04/10/2013 - 22:28 Link
michaelblue wrote:
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This is my favorite so far, because it makes the vase and flowers standout

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