Blurb for photo exhibition


dinneenp

Link Posted 17/05/2013 - 18:41
I'm
Trying to write a blurb for Galway Fringe Festival, I'll have some photo in it.
Can I get some honest opinions and any suggestions please?
Here are three photos that'll be in it (and about 3 more, 8 by 12", white mount and black frame) and 1 50 by 75cm
Acrylic print
http://www.flickr.com/photos/pacork/sets/72157633462728188/
Seduced by Light
The camera never lies.  But it can distort the truth and present us with a different view of the world around us.  We see the world around us through our eyes; a photographer sees the world through his camera. This instrument can be used to manipulate what we see by applying various techniques, including long shutter speeds, intentional camera movement, defocusing and many more.
 
In this series of beautiful photographs Patrick Dinneen takes you on an abstract, colourful journey to make you look at mundane, everyday item through the eyes of a dreamy child.
 
Patrick Dinneen is a Cork born, Galway based photographer (and a rare Pentax user). In today's world where everything has been photographed to death, he often tries to photograph his subject from a different perspective  to give the viewer something new and memorable. His work has been featured in the LA Times as well as local exhibitions.  You can view more of his photographs at http://www.photoblog.ie
Thanks in advance
Cheers,
Pa
http://www.photoblog.ie where every post have a musical reference as it's title.

johnha

Link Posted 19/05/2013 - 00:29
The linked photos are too abstract for me. I can't give any advice on the blurb other than to suggest that 'rare Pentax user' should perhaps be reworded or omitted. Perhaps a separate note stating that these images were captured with Pentax cameras/lenses might be more appropriate.

John.
PPG Flickr

dinneenp

Link Posted 19/05/2013 - 02:13
johnha wrote:
I can't give any advice on the blurb other than to suggest that 'rare Pentax user' should perhaps be reworded or omitted. Perhaps a separate note stating that these images were captured with Pentax cameras/lenses might be more appropriate.

John.

Thanks. I was thinking I'll remove that (rare pentax user) alright. for the general public it'll go straight over their heads.
The section about me probably should state a bit more about me and photography; how long I've been shooting etc.
Cheers,
Pa
http://www.photoblog.ie where every post have a musical reference as it's title.

cabstar

Link Posted 19/05/2013 - 02:36
I dont understand the dreamy child part, first it says about you then refers to a child. I think something along the lines of a different perspective or a dream like perspective.

I think I would change the word death to extreme. I would also cut out local exhibitions, just LA Times and has been exhibited numerous times, local sounds too small.

Nice images, I can imagine those being popular. Good luck with the exhibition.
PPG Wedding photography Flickr
Concert photography

Currently on a Pentax hiatus until an FF Pentax is released

Pentaxophile

Link Posted 19/05/2013 - 10:25
The dreamy child bit makes sense to me,

Quote:
In this series of beautiful photographs Patrick Dinneen takes you on an abstract, colourful journey to make you look at mundane, everyday item through the eyes of a dreamy child.

For me there isn't any confusion between the photographer and the hypothetical 'dreamy child', through whose eyes the photographer is inviting you to see the world. I actually think it's a nice bit of writing. 'Inviting you to look at' might be better than 'to make you look at' though.

The pictures, of course, must match the promise implied by the writing - from what you have written I would be expecting recognisable objects but from a strikingly fresh and surprising perspective. The abstracts are great but don't quite deliver that for me. If those are the images you are exhibiting, I might rethink the description slightly.

In the last paragraph, yes - include more details about you, and perhaps avoid restating your interest in photographing things from a different perspective, which you have already stated in the preceding paragraphs.

Agree on omitting the Pentax user bit, and Gary's comment re 'local exhibitions'.
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Last Edited by Pentaxophile on 19/05/2013 - 10:28

dinneenp

Link Posted 20/05/2013 - 13:57
Here's version 2, with a few changes:
Seduced by Light
The camera never lies. But it can distort the truth and present us with a different view of the world around us. We see the world around us through our eyes; a photographer sees the world through his camera. This instrument can be used to manipulate what we see by applying various techniques, including long shutter speeds, intentional camera movement, defocusing and many more.
In this series of beautiful photographs Patrick Dinneen invites you on an abstract journey through a dreamlike world of images bursting with colour.

Patrick Dinneen is a Cork born, Galway based photographer. He has no one preferred style of photography, instead enjoys photographing anything that captures his eyes’ attention.

He proudest achievement is date is having his work featured in the LA Times. When he isn’t behind his camera he enjoys spending time with his family, playing or watching football, cycling or reading.
He also has a passion for music and has linked music with photography by giving every photo blog post a related music title. You can view more of his work at http://www.photoblog.ie
Cheers,
Pa
http://www.photoblog.ie where every post have a musical reference as it's title.

dinneenp

Link Posted 20/06/2013 - 08:24
Here's the information in The Galway Fringe Festival website about my exhibition.

If anyone's in Galway during July please feel free to pop in and see it.
Cheers,
Pa
http://www.photoblog.ie where every post have a musical reference as it's title.

Pentaxophile

Link Posted 20/06/2013 - 17:45
Congrats Patricks, that's excellent! I wish I was heading to ROI this summer, but unfortunately it's not likely
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