Broken Tree

by davidstorm

OK, so I would like some advice on this one as I cannot get my head around the composition. I like the colours and the general scene but it's not right. Any offers?

Shot as evening drew near - I was waiting for sunset colours, but it clouded over and started to snow a bit.

Pentax-M 28mm F3.5, K-x
Uploaded19/12/2011 - 22:01
CategoryLandscape / Travel
Shutter Speed1.3 sec
Aperturef/16
LensN/A
ISO100
Focal Length28mm

sandinista
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:06 Link
I think the tree might be the problem David as it cuts across instead of acting as a lead in, also the branches draw the eye into the bottom right.
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davidstorm
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:09 Link
sandinista wrote:
I think the tree might be the problem David as it cuts across instead of acting as a lead in, also the branches draw the eye into the bottom right.

What would you do with it Jim? I think the original composition was not right so I'll have to go back to the location and re-shoot it.

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David
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Charlotte
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:15 Link
That's really good David,
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.
davidstorm
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:17 Link
Charlotte wrote:
That's really good David,
I agree with Jim about the tree though it does draw the eye away to the bottom right.
Aside from that I think this is one of my favourite shots of yours. You're improving all the time.

Thanks Charlotte, it's great to get feedback from everyone on the Gallery - I think it really helps us all to improve!

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David
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sandinista
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:20 Link
I cropped it to a semi pano with equal parts water and sky which works pretty well to my untrained eye
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davidstorm
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:33 Link
sandinista wrote:
I cropped it to a semi pano with equal parts water and sky which works pretty well to my untrained eye

Thanks Jim, this is also what I thought but I don't think panos work too well on the PU Gallery.

All the best, David
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Blaze
Posted 19/12/2011 - 22:40 Link
I think it's a stunning shot which would stand on its own without the tree if you crop the water at the bottom ........ as Jim suggests
szgabor
Posted 20/12/2011 - 08:54 Link
I agree with the others. This is a great shot with beautiful colours and lights. Your main subject is the hill side and the composition doesn't need the tree in the forground IMHO. A crop could help it.
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pauljay
Posted 20/12/2011 - 09:11 Link
I think you've done a great job with what you had available.
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AxelLuther
Posted 20/12/2011 - 11:46 Link
amazing picture with such good usage of light and colors (and as others already sad - I also think that cropping the tree would make it even better)
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autumnlight
Posted 20/12/2011 - 13:06 Link
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.
AndrewA
Posted 20/12/2011 - 19:04 Link
Perhaps all it needs is the tree cropping out David, everything else works really well, and looks super large.
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GIULIO57
Posted 20/12/2011 - 20:15 Link
autumnlight wrote:
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.

Right words!!!This is a wonderful capture....and tree is like a window that help our arms to stay and to keep our head in the right position so eyes can admire this EDEN. Do you like my poetry????
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davidstorm
Posted 20/12/2011 - 20:41 Link
GIULIO57 wrote:
autumnlight wrote:
When enlarged this is stunning, no matter what you do with it.

Right words!!!This is a wonderful capture....and tree is like a window that help our arms to stay and to keep our head in the right position so eyes can admire this EDEN. Do you like my poetry????

Giulio, I think you have excelled with your peotry this time! I can picture in my head someone resting their arms on the tree and gazing at the view beyond. You have transported my picture to a fantasy land! Thank you, please keep the poetry coming.

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David
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sandinista
Posted 25/12/2011 - 09:49 Link
I've just seen the cropped version in PPG, nice work David
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Edited by sandinista: 25/12/2011 - 09:49
davidstorm
Posted 26/12/2011 - 14:49 Link
Sincere thanks to you all for your help and advice on this picture! It really is great to have such a wonderful community and such helpful comments.

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David
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