Under the railway


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I am wanting some constuctive critism on this photo please. I normally take landscapes but wanted to create a gritty urban photo. The underpass has two lanes separated by vertical metal bars and I wanted to include the prison like feel of these and the way it affects the light coming through.
17/03/2010 - 00:15Stu-D
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StephenLewis

Link Posted 17/03/2010 - 01:43
Interesting photo with the lines and cross hatching, etc.. But it seems to me there is too much, or maybe the wrong, lighting. Doesn't give my the grittiness I think you were wanting. Can't place my finger on it though. I know the tiled wall is stained, but still it all appears a bit sterile. Too clean?

Hope this is a bit of a help and not too negative. Look forward to seeing more.

Regards,

Stephen
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bwlchmawr

Link Posted 17/03/2010 - 11:58
No criticism from me: just my sort of venue! Interesting use of light and colour.

Andrew
Best wishes,

Andrew

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pauljay

Link Posted 17/03/2010 - 13:03
I tend to agree with Stephen. You might even get closer to the effect you want by converting it into black & white.
I look forward to seeing the updated version.

Paul.
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Stu-D

Link Posted 18/03/2010 - 21:37
I have uploaded a B&W version now to http://www.pentaxuser.co.uk/photo/b-w-version-of-under-the-railway-15618 (I cant work out how to update the version on this thread).

I think I prefer the colour version. It was taken in Knaresborough which isnt a very gritty place, so perhaps that is why there is no grit - there wasn't much 'grit' on location!

Thanks for your comments
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